For my research paper, decided to delve into the topic of dandruff among African hair. There have been an amazing amount of studies on the subject as well as what exactly causes dandruff. While the possibilities are endless, did you know that most dandruff is caused by a yeast-like fungus call Malasezzia? It habitates on the epidermis (the outer layer of skin) and is heavily found on hair places, thus explains why dandruff is found in hairy areas such as eyebrows, beards, and of course the scalp.
Based on my little blurb above, I’d say that I am pretty confident that I explained to topic thorough enough for my target audience. The target audience is, but not limited to, those who don’t know anything about the causes of dandruff as well as what can be done to combat the appearance of flaking. Through my own experiments based on home remedies from Pinterest and a profession hair dresser, I believe that I have found a cheap viable solution. Most shampoos that target certain things are often overpriced and, surprisingly, dry out hair so much. General dryness also contributes to dandruff, thus not really conquering anything. So what is one possibly lazy person to do? That was the basis for my research.
I originally wanted to wash my hair every day or every other day. That didn’t work out in the end as my hair type can’t be washed so often. Secondly, even every other day is too much washing. My hair is naturally dry, so applying oils is mandatory. If you meet a black person who says they never oil their hair, take a look at their heads. If they have luscious long shiny hair, they must have some good genes or they are completely lying. When I interviewed my hairdresser, she literally yelled at me for washing my hair so often. Once hair is too dry, it’ll begin to become brittle and break off. You may wonder, “Why don’t you just apply oil after washing it? Wouldn’t that stop it from becoming brittle?” Your answer is “NOPE!” Do you even know how much extra work that would be? I’d be in the bathroom even longer than I already am. It takes about an hour or so a week to wash my hair. I don’t need to devout any more time to my hair than I already do now. So, following the advice given to me, I resumed my normal washing schedule of once a week. Less water wasted, less time wasted.
My first draft consisted of myself pouring through article after article. By that I mean, staring at the screen not making any real sense of anything until looking at Wikipedia first. Finally understanding what exactly those journals of dermatology were saying, I was ready to make sense of them. That process consisted of screen capping and exporting into Microsoft Paint so I could highlight and draw boxes around what was important. This made it a lot easier as I found that when faced with a wall of text, I would get a bit depressed just looking at it and realizing there was more and more to read. When broken down in parts, away from the rest of the article, reading feel quick and not a drag. That was how my literature review was constructed.
After comments and such, Wikipedia was removed from my reference page. While yes, Wikipedia is one of the worst sources ever where anyone can change things however, I highly doubt someone is going to modify the history of Malasezzia. No one just knows this information off the top off their head so I used it as a source. My bad. I also worked on organization of the sentences within paragraphs and paragraphs within the paper. I added in a few more sources for extra measure. You can never have too many sources!
The comments I received were specific to this project. I was expecting to see “I have no idea where you were going with this.” Or “I’m so confused.” But I didn’t – somehow- and were mostly the terms from the article about Dating Spiderman and whatnot. Nothing really helpful about the actual paper though. I say that without any ill intent, they just didn’t help me with things like grammar or word choice. Not asking to rewrite my paper for me just indicate if I’m on the right path or not.
My sources are, for the most part, from Library Onesearch. Off the gtop of my head I think I have two articles from the British Journal of Dermatology and two articles from the American Journal of Dermatology. We only needed six references but I have around eight. When writing my second draft, I looked at the rubric to follow what it said as closely as possible. I’ve already gotten into enough hot water not following the rubric this semester. The aspect I will be focusing on this last draft is the length. I have only five pages of body instead. It’s been kind of a letdown.