Totally Not Late, the Date is Wrong

For my research paper, decided to delve into the topic of dandruff among African hair. There have been an amazing amount of studies on the subject as well as what exactly causes dandruff. While the possibilities are endless, did you know that most dandruff is caused by a yeast-like fungus call Malasezzia? It habitates on the epidermis (the outer layer of skin) and is heavily found on hair places, thus explains why dandruff is found in hairy areas such as eyebrows, beards, and of course the scalp.

Based on my little blurb above, I’d say that I am pretty confident that I explained to topic thorough enough for my target audience. The target audience is, but not limited to, those who don’t know anything about the causes of dandruff as well as what can be done to combat the appearance of flaking. Through my own experiments based on home remedies from Pinterest and a profession hair dresser, I believe that I have found a cheap viable solution. Most shampoos that target certain things are often overpriced and, surprisingly, dry out hair so much. General dryness also contributes to dandruff, thus not really conquering anything. So what is one possibly lazy person to do? That was the basis for my research.

I originally wanted to wash my hair every day or every other day. That didn’t work out in the end as my hair type can’t be washed so often. Secondly, even every other day is too much washing. My hair is naturally dry, so applying oils is mandatory. If you meet a black person who says they never oil their hair, take a look at their heads. If they have luscious long shiny hair, they must have some good genes or they are completely lying. When I interviewed my hairdresser, she literally yelled at me for washing my hair so often. Once hair is too dry, it’ll begin to become brittle and break off. You may wonder, “Why don’t you just apply oil after washing it? Wouldn’t that stop it from becoming brittle?” Your answer is “NOPE!” Do you even know how much extra work that would be? I’d be in the bathroom even longer than I already am. It takes about an hour or so a week to wash my hair. I don’t need to devout any more time to my hair than I already do now. So, following the advice given to me, I resumed my normal washing schedule of once a week. Less water wasted, less time wasted.

My first draft consisted of myself pouring through article after article. By that I mean, staring at the screen not making any real sense of anything until looking at Wikipedia first. Finally understanding what exactly those journals of dermatology were saying, I was ready to make sense of them. That process consisted of screen capping and exporting into Microsoft Paint so I could highlight and draw boxes around what was important. This made it a lot easier as I found that when faced with a wall of text, I would get a bit depressed just looking at it and realizing there was more and more to read. When broken down in parts, away from the rest of the article, reading feel quick and not a drag. That was how my literature review was constructed.

After comments and such, Wikipedia was removed from my reference page. While yes, Wikipedia is one of the worst sources ever where anyone can change things however, I highly doubt someone is going to modify the history of Malasezzia. No one just knows this information off the top off their head so I used it as a source. My bad. I also worked on organization of the sentences within paragraphs and paragraphs within the paper. I added in a few more sources for extra measure. You can never have too many sources!

The comments I received were specific to this project. I was expecting to see “I have no idea where you were going with this.” Or “I’m so confused.” But I didn’t – somehow- and were mostly the terms from the article about Dating Spiderman and whatnot. Nothing really helpful about the actual paper though. I say that without any ill intent, they just didn’t help me with things like grammar or word choice. Not asking to rewrite my paper for me just indicate if I’m on the right path or not.

My sources are, for the most part, from Library Onesearch. Off the gtop of my head I think I have two articles from the British Journal of Dermatology and two articles from the American Journal of Dermatology. We only needed six references but I have around eight. When writing my second draft, I looked at the rubric to follow what it said as closely as possible. I’ve already gotten into enough hot water not following the rubric this semester. The aspect I will be focusing on this last draft is the length. I have only five pages of body instead. It’s been kind of a letdown.


This Can’t Possibly Be Real…

“Walk, Talk, Cook, Eat: A Guide to Using Sources” was terrible and should be forgotten forever. “Annoying Ways People Use Sources” was actually helpful and not too painful to read, unlike the former. With a range of humor, Kyle D. Stedman explains what are the most common mistakes and how to fix them. Let’s not forget that some of the names are pretty hilarious. “Am I in the Right Movie?” or “Dating Spiderman” are two of my favorite. However, the whole metaphor at the beginning had me ‘hooked’ to a point. Bad writers are  like bad drivers, an accident waiting to happen. But then when it is further explained, it feels that the metaphor becomes really unbalanced. “You don’t know the generally accepted practices of using sources (especially in academic writing) in the U.S. Or, You know the guidelines but don’t care.” and “They don’t know that the generally accepted practice of highway driving in the U.S. is to move to the right if an upcoming car wants to pass. Or, They know the guidelines but don’t care.” don’t match! (2 -4) These two lists are not comparable. Driving is a much more common area of knowledge. Ask any professional or municipal driver about citing sources in any format. Unless they had a stint in high school or higher education where they were just really into writing research papers with the scholarliest of sources. Needless to say, that’s extremely unlikely.

The was one annoyance that helped me the most. The “I Swear I Did the Research!”, while broken into multiple parts, one example is the most helpful. “Some researchers have suggested “curriculum” as a key element in the design of web-based courses (Berge, 1998; Driscoll, 1998; Meyen, Tangen, & Lian, 1999; Wiens & Gunter, 1998).” has a multitude of sources. Unit 3 has the requirement of at least six sources. Only so much can be said without being repeated. What if multiple sources have the same or generally similar information? Is it plagiarism if I cite one but not the other? In the article, the fix basically says to cut out older sources, as their information might not be as relevant anymore. That has to be one of the dumbest fixes I’ve ever heard. That’s almost saying “Well this looks cluttered, just knock some of this off here and there. Now it’s good.” How about I just put a bandage on my gaping wound or covering my wall with duct tape after a bus crashes through it. That doesn’t help! If my sources cover the same or oh so similar topics, I’m citing them in list form right after my quotation.

An Old Man Died, but Look a Computer

“You come late. When you arrive, others have long preceded you, and they are engaged in a heated discussion, a discussion too heated for them to pause and tell you exactly what it is about… You listen for a while, until you decide that you have caught the tenor of the argument; then you put in your oar. Someone answers; you answer him; another comes to your defense; another aligns himself against you… The hour grows late, you must depart. And you do depart, with the discussion still vigorously in progress.” perfectly summarizes Colleen Doyle’s article on the connections between inquiry-based research and life outside of the classroom. (See what I did there, applying suggestions from class). I was perfectly understanding of the first quote, the second about baseball, and supposedly easier, threw me for a loop. Doyle’s other hypothetical situations are, I feel, looking too deeply into the given situation. The decision of calling in to work because the reader is late is a prime example. Yes this is the example for audience, purpose, and context. However, no one really thinks like that. I certainly don’t. The thank you card is the same. I simply call. My grandmas love to hear exactly when I got the gift not a week or two later thanks to snail mail.

Ben Bennett-Carpenter delves into the details of the inquiry based writing compared to Doyle who introduced and related.  The project can be a variety of different mediums. Interviews, survey, books, media, etc. He then goes into great detail of what it should consist of, a page and a quarter. His article is very helpful in what is actually needed in research project. The questions for further discussion were a bit useless though. “If you can ask any question about anything, what would you ask?”  Did that really need to be printed?

You may be wondering why I chose to talk about two of the articles? These was a toss up between the two. While the third article was full of terrible questions, the two articles from the book explained more to me. Doyle’s article introduced the concept with that wondrous first quote. Bennett-Carpenter explained everything I needed.